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Need feedback on my digital art!

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burakku	Post #587507
Member 5:57 pm, Feb 15 2013 Posts: 4	http://fc04.deviantart.net/fs71/i/2012/159/a/8/shizaya_by_storm chained-d52t40n.png http://fc03.deviantart.net/fs70/i/2013/034/c/c/halibel_under_the_ stars_by_stormchained-d5tqxjo.jpg also videos of few timelapses: http://youtube.com/user/stormchainer wonder if anyone around here could gimme few tips or pointers =] thanks! >_< ________________ http://stormchained.deviantart.com/ Friend me all around x]
Mamsmilk	Post #587510
Member 6:52 pm, Feb 15 2013 Posts: 7606	Not bad, but I think you should do something about the hair to give it depth, probably some shine, for example, the sideburns in the second pic. You don't leave the bodies flat in tone, so the hair should follow the same style to me. Sort of conflicting otherwise. You did it well on the top of the head though.
Scyfon	Post #587523
Mome Basher Member 10:28 pm, Feb 15 2013 Posts: 3233	Hope you don't mind me asking, but...is Halibel supposed to look pregnant? Also, I think that her legs (from hips to knees) need to be longer too. The proportions seems a little off. I somewhat don't agree with the hard white (?) back lighting either. Make it more subtle. She looks like she's sitting in a bush of some sort so light shouldn't be bouncing that much and that hard near the ground, especially since its a night setting. Other than those, they're looking pretty good! ________________ dA FACT: Signing forum posts is as stupid as "signing off" a phone call.
MangomyTango	Post #587528
Member 11:45 pm, Feb 15 2013 Posts: 151	your skin coloring is REALLY good...but the drawing part has something left to be desired. ________________ KanataxYuki will always remain in my heart... Their love is so profound~! CrangolaFango
Saons	Post #587533
Manga Eater Member 12:39 am, Feb 16 2013 Posts: 436	I'll point out some things I've noticed. You need to add depth!! For both (especially the first one) it looks too chaotic -- you need to have some sort of backlighting that pushes them out of the background. But the hair and the clothes don't have a lot of value, so they look like they all have equal lighting (which is untrue, realistically). I suggest doing some value studies so you can get a feel for how shadows work to make an image "pop". For the second one, well.. I'd recommend looking at some female anatomy references. Waists aren't that small in proportion to the rest of the body (at least, I hope not). Secondly, the stomach... is a bit confusing, especially with the lighting. Is she supposed to be pregnant, as someone else pointed out? Thirdly, her neck's too long, as are her arms. Fourthly--where are her feet?! Don't hide parts of the body you don't want to draw! They still belong there! Also keep a consistent light source! For the woman, the light falls on her face and onto her breasts at different angles. There's also colour theory, but I find that hard to relay to others. [Look it up if you feel inclined] For the most part though they're pretty good. Keep practicing and you'll be fantastic! Here's some good references for you: Fantastic value study: http://browse.deviantart.com/art/Value-Study-2-283054635 Female anatomy: http://fc06.deviantart.net/fs12/f/2006/329/2/3/Female_Anatomy _Patterns_by_Snigom.jpg ________________ Go to work, send your kids to school; Follow fashion, act normal; Walk on the pavement, watch T.V.; Save for retirement, obey the law. Repeat after me: I am free.
otakuness	Post #598604
changing my stars Member 7:50 pm, May 11 2013 Posts: 1420	pretty good. i like the first one. halibel has a stomach bump. weird. ________________ oh please do click this! "Oh come on!~! I just seduced your boyfriend, its not like I made him break up with you or anything serious like that, nice wrist scars by the way". GUESS WHO??
OffLn	Post #599873
Hardcore  Member 7:55 am, May 20 2013 Posts: 99	Hm, the colors of both the pics are pretty good; emitting enough dark essence. The first pic is perfect but there're a lot of questions to the second one. I'm pretty much not satisfied with her lips and the chest and the abdomen look weird. Ditto Scyfon's comment about the pregnant part. ________________ Let's join our Folding@Home (F@H) team, minna-san!