I'm trying to learn editing manga and I wanted to get some opinions on the sample page I did.

http://img152.imageshack.us/img152/6603/scanhmgcopyjl6.jpg

Any tips or suggestions on what to improve would be greatly appreciated.

I cant say anything that needs to be improved, it looks really nice. =D

Can you post the original image for comparison ?

@Nisseman Thanks

Here's the original Deva Sorry it's a big pic.
http://img520.imageshack.us/img520/1901/scanhmgrd1.jpg

Well for a first try pretty good, but the redraws look a bit messy, especially near the window, how much do you leveled the blacks ?

I'm trying to get better with the clone tool so I'm going to be practicing on the various raws I have to improve.

I think it was 50 since I was using a tutorial so I just followed what it said.

Don't stretch out your text like that.

Do you have any advice on what the text settings should be?

I don't know which tutorial you used, here the one I started with concerning typesetting : http://sen.monkey-pirate.com/t_edit-editing.html#text

I think it is quite a helpfull tutorial for starting, but I only edit for fun ;)

edit: Just saw the picture you used is form there, so I guess you already know that ^^

Here another link http://www.unblessed.net/guide/main.html

Thanks for the link to second site Deva. I'm going to read through it now plus some of the others I found. (^w^)

I'm going to be editing with a small group of friends so I'm happy they will have patience while I'm learning.

-Wild Words don't have [ ]. So you must use another font for that in the translation note part. Becomes a sign like this instead -`, of [

- Make the text more centred in the speech bubbles.

- I find some "dirt" in the picture also.

- and "dear hana", "when I met saki" and "the end of genroku" should have a white line around the text.

Overall, good job.


And sorry for my terrible English.

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Thanks for you input crazyankan. I didn't even notice that. I'll make sure to use a different font when I need to use an [].

I did have trouble centering the text but I'll work on it.

I'll remember to add the stroke around the text next time too.

You use the center text option in Photoshop ?

I did put the paragraph on center but it looked sort of weird.

hmmm...

redraw looks bad, especially the bottom right and those are pretty simple redraws areas. Anywho, you have dust. for example the top right bubble has obvious dust.
"Dust" is stuff in white/black areas that shouldn't be there. you have more on the bottom left.
The text in the gray areas- "dear hana" etc. should be stroked a bit. like 2 px. 3 is pushing it. to me it looks like thoughts also, which you should make gray, like the other thoughts on the page.

Your thoughts on the bottom right need a period at the end. your text isn't centered in your bubbles, along with that it's a touch big, you should resize it based on need. for example the last bubble if you center the text they would most likely overlap. make sure to use the move tool. i am assuming you are using PS.

back to dust. the edge of the page on the right and bottom have dust where it should only be white.

oh and your tlers note is too big. you should make that smaller and try to keep that on the white area instead of plastering it over multiple spots.

I think that's about it...i'm just eyeballing it from the link


edit- just noticed crazy pretty much mentioned it all

Last edited by Varna at 7:50 am, May 29 2008

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