Short and sweet, simple and predictable. We need more stories like this. No frills, ends simply, story of triumph over defeat. What's not to like here? That said, I think it needed about 3 or 4 more pages for a denouement after that climax.

I don't know why I like this oneshot so much. A couple of the comments here say that the story felt rushed, and while I agree that it might have been better had the story been given more pages I got the impression that things moved along nicely. You can pretty clearly see that the blonde likes our main character from the way she's so concerned over him even though she constantly berates him, and the main character realizing who he actually loves felt touching.

What can I say, I'm a sucker for a happy ending

I mean, how could she list so many points, and so many detailed ones at that, if she hadn't been watching him all along? It's kinda difficult to believe he didn't get it (though it could be argued he did).

It doesn't have many pages but I like what it tried to do. Rather the message that it incorporated was nice. Don't sit on your butt and that the things you want might be closer than you think. The two leads have a charming dynamic.

... Last updated on January 2nd, 2015, 11:34am

Certainly it delivers such a sweet romance story but it feels like it had more developments left to give. I don't think I can even ask for something like a real series/serialization (cause it worries me that the only thing that'll amount to is needless misunderstandings), but just more pages to develop the characters and their interactions, I guess?

... Last updated on October 30th, 2014, 5:06am

The story-idea was good; but the execution too rushed - you can't identify, see or even understand the feelings of the 2 protagonists, because there is just no time to get atached to them.