Wow, I was so surprised when I realized that you can actually tell by looking at it, that the manga-ka was an assistant of Arina Tanemura! There were some parts when the heroine resembled Fullmoon A LOT and some stylistic devices were used that are also typical for Tanemura.
But enough of that:
I quite enjoyed it. Yes, it was clicheé, but it was only an ordinary shojo-one-shot, which are, like, always repetitive. And I have to say that the heroine was at least not a real crybaby, she wanted to be strong and she had her pride. You don't read that often in this genre.
I think it was a pretty well-done one-shot.

... Last updated on August 12th, 2012, 6:25am

Typical shoujo. This time the girl is a tsundere. If you're in the mood for cliché tsundere heroine + childhood friend, then great! People are giving it flak just because it's cliché, but come on that's clearly what the mangaka was aiming for anyway.

My real complaint though is the bad translation. I mean, it's not AWFUL, but it's below average. There are some sentences using the wrong words, some sentences that don't even make sense, and lots of awkward phrasing. It's still pretty understandable I guess, and normally it wouldn't be a big deal since this is just a typical shoujo one-shot lol so no one really cares. But I personally think it's unfair these mistranslations make people misunderstand the story which prompts them to be overcritical. I honestly think that the main heroine would seem less like a Mary Sue if with proper translations, and the story itself wouldn't sound so overly clichéd like it was written by a teeny bopper.

Oh well, that's just my two cents anyway. Like I said, it's probably not that big of a deal. If you're not as annoyingly nitpicky as me when it comes to characterization or plot (of a shoujo one-shot, of all things), then you could probably just shrug it off and have fun readind a romantic school-life shoujo manga.

Nooo, I actually ditched a oneshot and it was only about 30 pages long!!
The art was nice but the story was painfully typical. Why is it that whenever a girl gets into trouble, the guy she likes always happens to be a second away ready to bash the perpertator into little pieces?
*sighs* it wasn't just the typical-ness, the story just wasn't really interesting and the main character made such a fool of herself - cringe!
Why can't these authors shake it up a bit? Maybe, just maybe - the main character could be in love with her childhood friend and they DON'T like her back at first. Now there's a story.
Maybe to younger girls who really love the typical cutesy shoujo this would be good. But for someone like me searching for a shoujo that is brilliantly unique this just doesn't make the cut.
Rant complete.