This isn't a very unique premise, but from the vibes of it it seems like the author intent to make this a fluffy SoL of confused 2 teenagers who might be in love or not with each other.

I don't mind putting in awkward moments, because that's what often happens with teenagers. But the author is not well versed with breaking through that tension with a follow up breather. (This author has lots of experience writing 4 pages shock bait content) it kind of lacks the emotional subtlety for me to fully enjoy it due to the execution. Furthermore, sometimes the pacing in between the chapters feel jarring because the events and developments feel a bit 'skipped '.

You can really tell that the author is not used to the longer than 4 pages Twitter format...



Also, the world kinda feels small because the author only decides to focus on the two main characters, every other character in the series feel accessory. I feel claustrophobic. Well a deuteragonist focused setup isn't always bad, but it failed to capture the vibes of the other players of the same field (like the two gramps returning to youth, those couple manga on Twitter). Like I don't know whether the author is actually going to do romance or not, or two girls(guys??) just chilling. It just feels tense and introducing side characters more in depth might help alleviate the emotional load. (As both deuteragonist are just awkward all the time)

... Last updated on September 19th, 2023, 2:37am