Two friends in denial about their mutual affection.
Oneshot (Complete)






I'm not sure I should call it a punchline because it's not comedic, but something like that, the way it ended was just incredibly cheesy for me. But I find public spectacle confessions highly uncomfortable, so maybe it's because it was verging on that.
I usually like this kind of story and chemistry between characters. I just wish there was a little something more to pull at me, you know. This oneshot is indeed pleasant, looks very pretty and does get to the point, but I'm not insanely in love with it. I guess I'm at that stage where a little substance would have made me appreciate the drama a bit more. The eye candy could have gone a much longer way.
It's a beautiful short story, it grasps at your heartstrings, I just wish it was a bit more fleshed out. I feel like just 5 more pages would have done it, showing what happened and what's to come. It lacks a tiny bit in the execution department and needs a bit more fleshing out, but apart from that I liked very much.