I like V2.

First of all I must say, I really like your drawings blak

However, the layout...not that much.
4 versions...and they're all basically the same beisdes being spreaded downwards and having some icons removed (I think they should all be kept, btw).
To be honest ,and I hope you don't mind me saying this, I find the right side with the big guy trying to eat(?) the little guy...isn't really needed. If you take that out, space wouldn't really be a problem, and it could be more symmetrical.

The "Madness" font might need a different gradient as the black blends in with the shirt (I know colors are different when printed, but even so...). Red to orange-red maybe? Either change the gradient or put a white stroke on it like you did with...basically everything else xD

Finally, I know you said you didn't design the main Baka Manga Updates logo, but I don't know about purple, sky blue , light cyan and LIME...>_>

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If you change the logo, we can easily change the new version of the site to use it

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its nice. im new here and have no idea what most of this is, buit i really like it

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Just catering to ideas available as quickly as possible(Show everything you did) XD


That one is actually the original design before any of the other stuff was put in...and removing it was also one of the alternatives for space but people seemed to like it. But I guess I'll make a version of it when I get home...


I actually did that on purpose...not good?

you spelt the kanji for second part of manga wrong...

or maybe i'm just a pillock, i'm not sure

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I'm just imagining this full size and at a distance...

The illustrations are great! But there are far too many words and it's almost too jumbled with little MU guys. Have you seen those event t-shirts, like for festivals and the shirt has all the sponsors on it? That's kind of what it borders on. The text at the bottom... it's unnecessary. Just simplify the design a little and you wouldn't need it at all (unless it's a slogan for he site I don't know about)

Personally, while the right hand side maybe my favorite illustration, I would remove it and the madness bit. I would stretch/arrange the titles and maybe put online community at the bottom if you want. The top is lovely.

Just an honest critique. Remember with all designs, K.I.S.S. because you don't want people to miss the point. Try not to cater TOO much you'll get a crazy jumbled mess.

No offense is intended, fyi. All the parts are fantastic!

That was kinda what I was going for since the main purpose of this shirt was for events And the line at the bottom, since there's "the MU community", I also wanted to portray a "sign up now", or "join us" without sounding too plain...


This is what feedback and critiques are, no need to explain yourself...

...Well, in terms of design, no it isn't really good. You want people to be able to see what it says without squinting or staring at it before they can make out what it actually says :\
Also, because the word is "Madness" you wanna sorta...show that through the font/color as well. The font is good, the color is okay (if kept red), but the gradient sorta sends out the message that the madness is "in the dark". Know what I mean?

If you really wanna keep it that way, then maybe change the gradient from red to black to red to dark red just so that the bottom bit would be more visible.

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i like it....i cant wait to get it

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It's correct, it's just that the font chosen makes it slightly different. Just like there are two ways to write the letter "a" and they're both correct.

Anyways, as for the t-shirt, it's very nice!

I have to agree with this one. It doesn't match with the red-yellow tones of everything under the logo. How about the colors grey, white, yellow, red? (Although the purple,blue,green is eye-catching and will probably pique people's interest, I feel that it's too contrasting on a black background.)

and, the purple used for MU's url. Do you think it may be too dark? There will be people as blind as me at AX. *squints*

You are made of awesome Blak... and I'm so slow/late.

I like your v2, but I'd like to make some suggestions.

Well, I'd suggest to maybe add "The MU Community" to the front under your MU character but in a different font... preferably something that differentiates between Upper and Lower case letters... Maybe something like this http://www.blambot.com/font_rrl.shtml or this http://www.blambot.com/font_musashi.shtml. I'd also suggest moving the Baka mangaupdates on the front up and over a bit. In addition, I would move "The MU Community" on the back from the middle to right above the "partake in the MADNESS" line but change that to "Come And Partake In The MADNESS". Now that the MU Community has been moved over, there is space to increase the size of the forum rankings and to stagger them as well. Of course, resizing is not necessary if you stagger the rankings, but you might need to play with it a bit because the "odd" rankings have a shorter length then that "even" ones.

Now to get a picture of what that ^ means, here is a link and a v2 or that one to your v2 with the changes I suggested. Also, the font I used was MV Boli from Paint.Net (cause I was lazy and it looked good enough).

But... the only thing that should be changed/added is what was done to the front page. The other page is just to give another option (though it's just lacking isn't it).

Hope you like what I did there,

-Toto

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Yea, I vote V2


I agree.
I took it upon myself to edit the colors a bit. I changed purple to red, and I believe it adds immediate aesthetic improvement.I plan to do more, But it takes a hella lot of time when you don't have Photoshop and have to use Paint.

I think it would be better to change font colors of the rest of the shirt to match the logo, personally. But this is what I have so far.

V2
V2.01 (I had to convert to GIF to save the file when using paint, so the quality isn't as good.)

@Blak
Please don't take offense to me editing your work. I'm just trying to illustrate my point.

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Uhm. Can the front of the shirt be changed at all? Because having the mascot in the corner is kinda awkward for girls since it's like only on one side of our boob. >.>;

Uhh, a lot of shirts either have it on the pocket side or straight down the center...

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