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Edit: Also, "laying" is acceptable, as I understand it. It's a dialect thing (I've always assumed it's American although I don't know much about American dialects). Laying does sound more informal however. Lying would probably be better.

The use of laying actually is not acceptable since it is grammatically incorrect.

I have no objection to anything you have said except that my linguistics teachers have always insisted that you must never use the term "grammatically incorrect" but rather "grammatically non-standard" 😛 After all, grammar varies a lot between groups of people and changes too.

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Can anyone rephrase these?

I am proud to have always done well academically in school, mainly due to dedication, focus, and having my family members supporting me.

My first goal is to attain a degree in engineering. I hope to start my pursuit of this goal at the University of California.

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I have no objection to anything you have said except that my linguistics teachers have always insisted that you must never use the term "grammatically incorrect" but rather "grammatically non-standard" 😛 After all, grammar varies a lot between groups of people and changes too.

Ahha, thanks for teaching me something new.(:

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My affinity to these subjects continues to grow and I have an intense curiosity to learn more in these fields of study.

How about Continuing to grow is my affinity to/towards these subjects and I have an aspiration to further my knowledge in these fields of study. I omitted the "intense curiosity" part of the sentence since it did not sound quite right. To my understanding, curiosity means " an intense desire to know/learn something", so it sounded redundant to me as it would have been "...I have an intense intense desire to learn to learn more in these fields of study." I hope this helps?

I think intense curiosity is fine. Dictionary.com gives the definition of curiosity as "the desire to learn or know about anything; inquisitiveness." So you can speak of a mild curiosity or an intense one.

I also think "continuing to grow is my affinity" just doesn't sound right, sounds like Yoda with the sentence structure jumbled up. I think in that case affinity has to go at the start because it's the subject. And "I aspire" rather than "I have an aspiration" sounds better/more natural/more active to me, but I suppose they both mean the same thing.

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Directed towards the creator of this thread:

Out of curiosity (I have wondered this since the start of the thread), why did you not post your question (now questions) in the Random Questions thread?

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And you will murder someone one day, pika. If you're my daughter.

People with bad grammar attempting to fix other people's grammar mistakes...
Oh internets :'D

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Directed towards the creator of this thread:

Out of curiosity (I have wondered this since the start of the thread), why did you not post your question (now questions) in the Random Questions thread?

Cause I just figured out what that was and never knew it existed. Thnks will consider in the future.

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I am proud to have always done well academically in school, mainly due to dedication, focus, and having my family members supporting me.

What is the prompt? Technically, the schools can see if you've done well in school since they see your transcripts, right? (Actually, it's been a while so I don't remember the UC application...) But... this sentence is pretty general and bland.

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My first goal is to attain a degree in engineering. I hope to start my pursuit of this goal at the University of California.

Again, what is the prompt? If you chose "Engineering" as your entering major, you don't need to state this in the essay, do you? Can you expand your goal to something bigger? Or take what Odette suggested on the top of page 2 on this thread to begin with an anecdote. I basically did that for my UC application years ago...

Just turned in my application. Thanks everyone for helping me out. 😀