The idea behind Cheese in the Trap (CitT) certainly isn’t new, but it’s fascinating – it’s a puzzle about people. People and relationships. What’s inside of them? Are they or their words/actions/intentions good or bad, true or false? Is the main guy genuine/innocent or a puppet master pulling the strings behind the scenes? How do we relate to/perceive/understand one another? But…but…but… The execution of that idea is harder to pull off on paper (or whatever). At least at first, CitT is all mysterious and the main gal seems perceptive and smart, which is lovely. But later, CitT just becomes childish/immature with middle school-ish issues and drama. And even worse, it becomes repetitive and boring.
For (spoiler-ish?) example:
Main girl: Oh no – hll no – that btch wore the same style of clothes as me. (Nevermind that the main girl’s style of clothes is commonly worn at school, irl – pants and a shirt. Yeah, you read that right, pants and a shirt.) Ttch. This is my story dmn it, not hers. Kill the btch! (Rolling my eyes! Who cares what she wears! Can’t you, the main character, just be glad she at least wears clothes!!)
Or. Hey, the b*tch has a key chain that looks like the one I lost. It must be mine! So ask repeatedly and repeatedly and repeatedly about it. Don’t accept her excuse that she bought it from the same store. Just keep asking about it/obsessing over it. (Really! Really!! … It’s a key chain! You’ve already asked about it, now just move on. Please! Why obsess over it? Life is bigger than a key chain!!!)
Or. All villains please obsess over main character. If not main character, then main character’s friend. And remember: be obsessive in the same sort of way. Add nothing new to the story. Don’t you dare be unique or interesting.
I mean, it just goes on. And because it’s so repetitive with the same old-same old with nothing else that’s fresh or interesting, I just can’t take any more of this. I mean, had the author at least used these childish episodes to exemplify the post-trauma/damage
stalking
can cause to a person’s psyche, then, ok, whatever, I could perhaps begrudgingly accept it (grumble, grumble). But the author didn’t go there (so far at least). The main character really is this immature. The story really is this boring. So, I’m out. No more traps for me.
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