I know this was was only 34 pages, so it was really was a short frame of time to work within, but still...I REALLY thought this could have been better.
Tsujimura is your usual shojo heroine, except for being more of an air head then most. She lacks any personality whatsoever except for the fact of priding herself in having a "Popular" boyfriend and wanting to take it to the next level. She has no history, or other personality to indicate why her boyfriend loves her either, except that she is enthusiastic. Not to mention the jelousy card from the other guy seemed like a plot toy more then anything. He was crudely drawn, with almost no real details on his face, and he goes from one extreme to the end with almost no reason. (Usually that can be a great mark of story craftmenship if done right, but not in this one shot)
And while we're going there, the boyfriend was stale. He had almost like no part in the whole thing, since the manga mainly remained on Tsujimura, the boyfriend was your Mr. Sue. No problems with him, saves the girl right in time....blah, blah, blah.
Please only read this manga if you have time on your hands, or something just before going to sleep. It will make you feel better, how much more origanal your dreams are compared to this manga.

Somehow....the ending didn't really suit the rest of the manga..... I mean, it's really sweet, right? And cute, and generally there's an innocent feel to it. So the ending, when it gets all sexy and smutty, just feels kinda disconnected and random. It's like.....this person should stick to the sweet stuff.