banner_jpg
Username/Email: Password:
Forums

A song i composed

You must be registered to post!
From User
Message Body
Post #131068
user avatar
Member

7:36 pm, Feb 27 2008
Posts: 21


I dunno if this is the right section for this post , but please listen + comment on two songs i composedd in my spare time... Im a newbie at composing so i wish to hear some comments

http://www.sendspace.com/file/fp77vh

http://www.sendspace.com/file/0x6apo

Post #131072
user avatar
Smooth Operator
Super Mod

7:42 pm, Feb 27 2008
Posts: 5329


Its good. But I don't exactly know what your trying to do with it exactly. Is it a showcase for technical prowess? And can you actually play that? (It was a midi file so I don't know if that is actually you playing).

Classical music isn't really my thing, but I do dig the stops and tempo shifts.

________________
Listen here
Livin just to keep from dyin
User Posted Image
user avatar
sleepy ghost
Member

7:53 pm, Feb 27 2008
Posts: 1140


You have guts to ask for opinions about something like this from essentially total strangers, so I give you props for that.

I'm in no way any kind of expert so I'll just tell you what I think:
Above The Moon: The first 50 seconds were pretty good and had a good flow with it. The last 12 seconds seemed to be forced somehow, like you wanted to end the song.

Behind the Wall: Kind of a wierd song. There was a really awkward silence at 00:27 (00minutes and 27 seconds). This kind of split the song and made it seem like 2 songs for the first 27 seconds and the last half a different song. Again, the ending could also use some work.

Good attempts at writing and composing music, but it could use a little bit of tweaking.

________________
"When we remember we are all mad, the mysteries disappear and life stands explained."
- Samuel Clemens/Mark Twain
user avatar
LnoE RDeiR
 Member

8:03 pm, Feb 27 2008
Posts: 116


I am by no means expert but I generally listen to various kind of music including classical. Hmm I actually liked behind the moon but as for behind the wall...
I think it started well but as mentioned above it looks like there are two songs and the second (after 27s) sounds rushed and uncertain...
But no matter, I think its great that you try to compose and have the guts to ask opinions. Good luck

Post #131534
user avatar
Member

6:55 pm, Feb 28 2008
Posts: 21


wow thx for the comments xD it was rushed causeee i dunno how to use overture program and it only gave me so many bars ... >< but oh wellsz =) i'll exploree the program as i compose more =0 thx for the advices a bunch xD it helped me think about it alot xD thx again

maybe i can use behind the wall for 2 different songs instead of forcing it into one =)

user avatar
Member

11:24 am, Feb 29 2008
Posts: 588


The songs sound promising, I'll expect you to put some more up for us to hear again.

Post #132658
user avatar
Member

8:00 pm, Mar 1 2008
Posts: 21


hehe =) thx for the encouragement xD

You must be registered to post!